Eli assouline Mrs. KahanaHumanitiesJanuary 19 2018Goal essay When 2018 comes, I have new goals. My goal will change the way I learn and change the way my friends learn. As Ronald Reagan says “What is important is that one strives to achieve a goal”. Excessive talking syndrome is when I talk and my teacher tells me to stop but I talk more, more. My weakness in class is excessive talking syndrome. I talk in class a lot and I need a solution. My solution is to ignore any classmates that try to talk or distract me during class. For example, during class I could ask them to tell me later. Lastly, I could also write all my thoughts down before class. I will know I’ve achieved the goal when I get positive emails from teachers. A helpful strategy is to sit away from my friends during class. This way talking to my friends would be harder for me to inter. Also, I won’t be tempted to talk if I’m sitting and working away from my friends. Lastly, I will stay focused and if someone tries to talk to me I’ll ignore them. This time I will know I’ve achieved my goals by getting good grades. My last strategy I have is to ignore my friends if they try to talk to me. I’ve never tried this method because I get distracted very easily. After all, if I don’t ignore I will talk and if I talk I will get in trouble. Ignoring somebody is a very hard thing to do. The reason is because in order to ignore somebody you don’t pay attention to them until they get board and stop. Now I’m sure all of these strategies will help with my goals. With my goal excessive talking syndrome I would get more work done. The way I will help myself is by not talking in class so I don’t get in trouble and get work done. Happy new year to me and my goals. Eli You have grown so much as a writer! You picked an excellent goal, wrote about useful strategies to achieve your goal & consistently focused on one topic throughout your paper. Please see my notes for specifics. 93/100CATEGORYExceeds Standard19-20 pointsMeets Standard17-18 pointsAlmost at Standard15-16 pointsBelow Standard10-14 pointsIntroductory paragraphThe introduction is inviting, states the main topic and previews the structure of the paper. Includes all necessary elements of an introductory paragraph.The introduction clearly states the main topic and previews the structure of the paper, but is not particularly inviting to the reader. Includes all necessary elements of an introductory paragraph.The introduction states the main topic, but does not adequately preview the structure of the paper nor is it particularly inviting to the reader. Does not include all the necessary elements of an introductory paragraph.There is no clear introduction of the main topic or structure of the paper. Does not include all the necessary elements of an introductory paragraph.Body paragraphs organizationDetails are placed in a logical order and the way they are presented effectively keeps the interest of the reader. Supportive sentences clarify and explain the topic sentenceDetails are placed in a logical order, but the way in which they are presented/introduced sometimes makes the writing less interesting. Supportive sentences clarify and explain the topic sentenceSome details are not in a logical or expected order, and this distracts the reader. Supportive sentences do not always clarify and explain the topic sentenceMany details are not in a logical or expected order. There is little sense that the writing is organized. Supportive sentences do not clarify and explain the topic sentenceFocus on Topic (Content)There is one clear, well-focused topic. Main idea stands out and is supported by detailed information.Main idea is clear but the supporting information is general.Main idea is somewhat clear but there is a need for more supporting information.The main idea is not clear. There is a seemingly random collection of information.Conclusion (Organization)The conclusion is strong and leaves the reader with a feeling that they understand what the writer is “getting at.” Includes all the necessary elements of a closing paragraphThe conclusion is recognizable and ties up almost all the loose ends.Includes all the necessary elements of a closing paragraphThe conclusion is recognizable, but does not tie up several loose ends. Does not include all the necessary elements of a closing paragraphThere is no clear conclusion, the paper just ends. Does not include all the necessary elements of a closing paragraphGrammar & Spelling (Conventions)Consistently follows rules for spelling and correct use of grammar. Uses complete sentences and consistently indicates paragraphs.Generally follows rules for spelling and correct use of grammar. Uses complete sentences generally and indicates paragraphs often.Mostly does not follow rules of spelling and correct use of grammar. Mostly exhibits errors in sentence structure that impede communication. Generally does not indicate paragraphsDoes not follow rules for spelling and correct use of grammar. Uses sentence structure that makes it quite difficult to understand. Does not use paragraphing.